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Some people think that when recruiting, companies should aim to take on people who are innovative and able to work independently while others considered they should recruit people who are able to work in a team and follow instructions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, companies are making recruitment more complicated to choose the best candidate. Many argue that creative and independent workers tend to perform better.
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, others think those willing to work in a group and disciplined are more efficient. In my opinion,
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both statements are true to some extent and I will elaborate on them in the following essay.
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, people that work in a group are always more productive because sharing ideas and workloads can solve problems in a more effective method.
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, a group of 5 designers not only complete their objectives in a shorter period
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 but are
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 able to counter-check each other mistakes which resulted in lesser errors in their final products.
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, the generation
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 more disciplined and follows command may give more benefits to the
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 because of easier monitoring of their performance.
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, an employee who follows the
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's orders and completes given tasks on time is always more efficient.
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, these lead to a higher success rate during recruitment.
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, creativity and innovation are crucial for an employee too. During recruitment, creativity is one of the major criteria that a
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 looking for because it is a prerequisite to improve a product or system.
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, creative people tend to create new products and better solutions.
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, an employee that able to work independently is critical for jobs in a remote area because supervision by their superiors is almost impossible. In conclusion,
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's working situation. Overall, both innovation and teamwork are important for a worker,
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 should recruit them with these skills.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innovative
  • independent
  • creative
  • problem-solving skills
  • development
  • new ideas
  • solutions
  • productivity
  • competitiveness
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • communication
  • consistency
  • adherence
  • policies
  • conflicts
  • efficiency
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