Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation,such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money.others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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notion is different from each other.It
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that it is better to accept worse situations
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or monetary problems.While others disagree and agree that it would be better to try hard,to enhance these issues.I opine that
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view is
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than the former.In
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I will discuss both views and give my opinion.
To begin
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of reasons why people opt
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to undergo bad situations as they know how to solve the matters,
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they think doing so is not in their own hands.
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,research indicates that 45% of
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always live
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under threat that they admit
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punishment is from God.
Therefore
,they agree and tend to accept what is happening in their life.
On the other hand
,more people tend to alter their current position into successful life
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.
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they want to encourage themselves to be in a great future.
For instance
,take the
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of Apple(Bill Gates)as an example.He
first
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,he did hard work and established his own company.
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powerful success
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and was admitted
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of the most popular business
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with high incomes.That's why many supporters opine that bad regulations are not superior as well. To conclude,I would say different masses have
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which never
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each other.But as far as I'm concerned person who lives under challenging circumstances,
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will achieve better results.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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