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Directors of large organizations earn much higher salaries than ordinary employees do. Some people think it is necessary, but others hold that it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In
this
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 contemporary era, most industries or
organizations
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 which are large pay much higher
salaries
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 to
directors
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 than that to normal
employees
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 due to
this
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 some people think it is necessary to pay, while others oppose it and consider it unfair. I will discuss both views and give my opinion in the conclusion. On the one hand,
directors
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 are the
one
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 who manage the
organizations
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 because of
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 they have a burden on their shoulders more than common
employees
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. To explain, in any company,
directors
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 make decisions that are connected to the
organization
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’s future and manage the whole
organization
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,
that is
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 why they get higher
salaries
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 than normal people.
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, directories have more knowledge and skills about
work
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.
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,
directors
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 are paid higher
salaries
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 because of their knowledge and their
work
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.
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, it is believed that
employees
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 are the main pillar of
the
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organizations
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organization
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. To illustrate, most of the normal
work
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 is done by
employees
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.
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, they spend the most time in the
organization
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 doing their
work
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, while other high-position individuals do not spend that much time.
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 why it is considered that
employees
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 should pay equal
salaries
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 as
directors
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 as they spend more time in the
organization
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.
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, the
organization
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 cannot run without
employees
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.
Therefore
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, ordinary
employees
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 should get more
salaries
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 as they do more
work
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 and are considered
as
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apply
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a pillar of
organizations
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. In conclusion, in my opinion,
directors
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 should have more
salaries
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 than normal
employees
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 as they have more knowledge and skills,
also
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 they make some hard decisions about the
organization
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’s future, because of
this
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 they have more burden than common
employees
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.

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