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Nowadays, there is a trend of learning through distance mode of education. Why people do prefer such mode of education? And what challenges are involved in it?

#trend #distance #mode #education #people #challenges
It is undeniable that as long as
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technology develops, different
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 of education
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 will appear. Roughly 10 years ago all students were compelled
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 a course or attend
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 every day,
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however
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 world is changing and
people
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reality. I hold the view that
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 education became famous especially when Covid 19 covered
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the
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 and
people
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schools
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and schools
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 .
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 they were able
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 to the
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 new
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programs
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 like zoom. Nowadays everybody
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 able to use zoom in
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course
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. It is obvious that not everyone capable of
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 successful at it. I reckon that we
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 it,
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 nothing is impossible it will take
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time
 until
people
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 use it to the utmost. We can count
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benefit
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 of
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 education.
First
 of all not squandering
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 up, if you
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 you can easily eat something at home , in
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 way it is easy save money.
Disadvantage
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 is, it is impossible constantly conduct a lesson
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when the internet does not work and
connection
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 student miss some part of
program
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the program
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On the other hand
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 do their best in
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 not to
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such
 occur every
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 pile up and they make
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 , find
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