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Demand for food is increasing worldwide. What is the cause of this? What measures can the international community take to make sure the supply of food is enough?

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I believed that
food
 is very essential in everyone's life.On average, people can survive without
food
 at least for 3 days. Without proper intake of
food
, it can lead a person to die. So, to survive life and to do activities, they need proper
food
. In the following paragraphs, I will describe like what is the cause of the demand for
food
 and what steps should be taken by the government. The main cause for
this
 is due to the increase in population and the climatic changes. In the past, the population is not more than a million, but today it is extended beyond the millions. All of them need
food
 to survive. So that the
food
 production has to be increased. By using good agricultural methods and advanced equipment, it can be increased. Another reason is
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 in a climate like global warming, and ozone depletion. During that time, the production of
food
 is not easy.
However
, the government should take proper action to avoid
this
 kind of situation. By raising awareness among the people and taking rallies. And to plant trees in everyone's house. And
also
 discourage deforestation activities. The developed countries can export
food
 to the developing nations by developing a good collaboration. In conclusion, the demand for
food
 can be reduced by lower the use of fertilizers and using eco-friendly chemicals, overuse of modern equipment, wasting
food
 unnecessarily and avoiding environmental activities like deforestation and reducing the overuse of vehicles.
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