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For centuries, important parts of education have remained such as reading, writing and Math. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skills be made as fourth skill to the list. To what extent do you agree?

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For the past 100 years, Reading, Writing and Math took place as the important
skills
 in education, Now the
skills
 of
computers
 are top-notching
people
 who argue that computer
skills
 should place as the fourth important part of education. I Agree with the statement given by the
people
.
Firstly
,
computers
 are more advanced and improving computer
skills
 gives
people
 some knowledge of
technology
 and what
technology
 can do. Anywhere in ,
world
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 if we check any company we can see the Data is being stored in the hard drives. The present generation should be keen to learn the
skills
 and it is very necessary to learn the courses. We can do anything on the Laptop like study, play games, complete office work, enrol information on certain products, Etc.
Technology
 in the
world
 is booming and at present ,Information
technology
 is leading the
world
 and
people
 in the
world
 are looking toward the sector to obtain high paid jobs.
On the other hand
,
computers
 should be used in the right way. Because, Children can misuse
computers
, fall into fraud traps, doing some illegal issues. Management should handle the
computers
 to make students learn the
skills
 and make them understand their use of them. Make sure teachers instruct them not to misuse the
technology
 and use it in the right way. I
finally
 conclude I agree with the argument that placing computer
skills
 as a fourth skill in the list of important parts of education.
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