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In some countries, more and more adults choose to continue living with their parents after they graduate and find jobs. Do you think the benefits outweigh its drawbacks?

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Due to
high
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 price of housing, many young
people
 choose to live with their
parents
, even after they have found jobs.
This
 trend may be beneficial to family members economically, but it causes some problems
to
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for
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 both young
people
 and their
parents
. Living with
parents
 is a good way to reduce the cost of living, which is particularly important for those who newly graduate from school and earn a low salary. They do not need to rent or buy a house by themselves and they can
also
 share some necessities and electric appliances with their
parents
.
This
 enables young
people
 to save money for their future life.
However
, living together may make young adults become overly dependent on their
parents
. A common problem nowadays is that many children are spoiled by their
parents
 and after they grow up, they tend to lack
necessary
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 life skills.
By contrast
, living away from
parents
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their parents
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 would help young
people
 become mature and
adopt
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adapt
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 to society. Without
parents
’ assistance, young
people
 have to cope with all kinds of
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the problem
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problem
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problems
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 on their own.
Also
, living under the same roof may cause tension between children and
parents
 due to the generation gap and different lifestyles.
For example
, some young
people
 stay up late at night, which may conflict with their
parents
’ timetables and affect their rest.
Parents
 are dissatisfied with children’s “unhealthy” living habits, while children will complain that
parents
are interfere
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 with their freedom. Overall, living with
parents
 can be a temporary choice shortly after young
people
 leave school. But in the long run, they should be encouraged to move out of their
parents’
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parent’s
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 house so that they can acquire more life skills and learn to take
more
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on more
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 responsibilities.
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