Some people think that all lawbreakers should be put into prison, while others believe that there are better alternatives. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
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love to become Change to a singular noun
individual
criminals
because they think that there Fix the agreement mistake
criminal
is
more Correct subject-verb agreement
are
oppurtunities
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opportunities
compare
to normal life . Few people say that the person who had taken Wrong verb form
compared
such
step
should Correct article usage
a step
given
strict punishment like Change the verb form
give
be given
life long
jail Add a hyphen
life-long
also
other
speak that not Fix the agreement mistake
others
every one
is Replace the word
everyone
lawbreakers
and they must have Fix the agreement mistake
lawbreaker
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a second
for
living . I Completely agree with Change preposition
at
first
statement but I would like to give both side view and my opinion in the Change the article
the first
further
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To begin
with , ample of
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apply
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the country
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country's
goverment
gives death retribution for Correct your spelling
government
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small Add an article
a such
crime
. Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
Furthermore
, myraid
of human beings Correct your spelling
myriad
do
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apply
such
situation and plce
that they are not aware Correct your spelling
place
about
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of
it
and after some time it Correct pronoun usage
apply
get
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gets
harmfull
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harmful
for
them . Change preposition
to
Nonetheless
, putting man
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men
woman
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women
educate
as well as of they Change the form of the verb
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an idea
idea
about not Fix the agreement mistake
ideas
commiting
crimes . Correct your spelling
committing
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to this
, in every nation
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there
bunch
of pupils who Add an article
a bunch
commite
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commit
commute
committed
sucide
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suicide
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of lock up . By the way of illustration , 60% of misbehaved mankind hang on Correct article usage
the sacre
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the fan
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and
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of Add an article
a plethora
the plethora
rulemaker
countries Correct your spelling
rulemaking
are
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is
immplementing
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implementing
such
law by which no one have
to worry about Change the verb form
has
the
custody . Correct article usage
apply
Moreover
, beings also
belive
that Correct your spelling
believe
such
illegal
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an illegal
act
must Fix the agreement mistake
acts
fixed
because they are Change the verb form
fix
be fixed
also
getting scared becuase
of it . Correct your spelling
because
Additionally
, those committing petty crimes should be educated rather than imprisoned. This
is because there are numerous reasons leading to a path of crime such
as poverty or lack of education. Last
but not the least , somehow punishers are also
taking help
of educated Correct article usage
the help
prisioners
and they Correct your spelling
prisoners
also
give some gift
in return . To cite an example , as per Fix the agreement mistake
gifts
latest
article published in "THE HUFFINGTON POST" every Add an article
a latest
villan
are helping Correct your spelling
villain
police man
to catch more offender and cop release them for while .
To sum up , not Correct your spelling
policeman
every one
is born and brought up from Replace the word
everyone
culprit
background they do Correct article usage
a culprit
such
things for some reason but some of them are very rude also
they like to do
rape of Unnecessary verb
apply
male
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males
femae
which is very bad for society and because of Correct your spelling
female
this
reason they should put ibehind
rods .Correct your spelling
behind
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