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In many countries, people like to eat a wider variety of food than can be grown in their local area. As a result, much of the food people eat today has to come from other regions. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh disadvantages?

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INowadays
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Nowadays
, public debate has been going on about whether the advantages of
people
 eating
food
that is
 not local outweigh the disadvantages. Some believe that mixing up the
food
 cultures gives
people
 the ability to absorb all possible
nutrients
 that are needed for the body,
also
, buying
food
 from other regions helps to
support
 their economy. Others disagree stating that
people
’s
food
-related needs are
instiled
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installed
 in genes,
thus
,
people
 should eat only regional cuisine and
support
 their own farmers.
Firstly
, today's market and ability to transport
food
products
 have opened up ways for
people
 to learn about different cultures,
this
 has led to more and more
people
 getting interested and promoting eastern culture due to liking their cuisine.
In addition
, by importing
food
products
 made elsewhere we are supporting other regions’ economies,
thus
 allowing
third
-world counties to develop faster and more efficiently.
In addition
, some
foods
 contain
nutrients
 or minerals that are uncommon for the local
foods
, but still important to the optimal work of the organism, meaning, that by eating exotic
food
people
 are experiencing not only new flavours but
also
, the body soaks up all the
nutrients
 that have not been introduced to the organism.
This
 might lead to
people
 feeling happier, more rested and energized.
On the other hand
, some say that generations before us always ate local
foods
 and lived happily,
thus
 we should not change traditions or the cuisine of the country.
People
 who
support
such
idea
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 state that by eating uncommon
foods
people
 might affect their bodies in a harmful way because the geographical location of the country determines what edible
products
 earth provides us,
thus
 by eating exotic
food
 we disturb the natural way of living and interfere with nature’s advise of what should be grown and eaten in one part of the region.
In addition
, local farmers
also
 need
support
 to keep up with the ever-growing demand for vegetables and other
products
,
thus
 by buying locally-grown
products
people
 can
support
 local businesses and protect them from being pushed out of the competition. All in all, the benefits for the body, the introduction of different
nutrients
, and the help for other countries' economies do not outweigh the disadvantages. Because there is a belief that by eating
food
that is
 not common for the region
people
 interfere with the natural way of living and by supporting other regions’ economies we risk damaging our own.
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