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In many countries, people like to eat a wider variety of food than can be grown in their local area. As a result, much of the food people eat today has to come from other regions. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh disadvantages?

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, public debate has been going on about whether the advantages of
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 eating
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 not local outweigh the disadvantages. Some believe that mixing up the
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 cultures gives
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 the ability to absorb all possible
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 that are needed for the body,
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, buying
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 from other regions helps to
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 their economy. Others disagree stating that
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’s
food
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-related needs are
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installed
 in genes,
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,
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 should eat only regional cuisine and
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 their own farmers.
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, today's market and ability to transport
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products
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 have opened up ways for
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 to learn about different cultures,
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 has led to more and more
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 getting interested and promoting eastern culture due to liking their cuisine.
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, by importing
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products
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 made elsewhere we are supporting other regions’ economies,
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 allowing
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-world counties to develop faster and more efficiently.
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, some
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 contain
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 or minerals that are uncommon for the local
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, but still important to the optimal work of the organism, meaning, that by eating exotic
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people
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 are experiencing not only new flavours but
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, the body soaks up all the
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 that have not been introduced to the organism.
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 might lead to
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 feeling happier, more rested and energized.
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, some say that generations before us always ate local
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 and lived happily,
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 we should not change traditions or the cuisine of the country.
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 who
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 state that by eating uncommon
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people
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 might affect their bodies in a harmful way because the geographical location of the country determines what edible
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 earth provides us,
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 by eating exotic
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 we disturb the natural way of living and interfere with nature’s advise of what should be grown and eaten in one part of the region.
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, local farmers
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 need
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 to keep up with the ever-growing demand for vegetables and other
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,
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 by buying locally-grown
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people
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 can
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 local businesses and protect them from being pushed out of the competition. All in all, the benefits for the body, the introduction of different
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, and the help for other countries' economies do not outweigh the disadvantages. Because there is a belief that by eating
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 not common for the region
people
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 interfere with the natural way of living and by supporting other regions’ economies we risk damaging our own.
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