Many people try to achieve success through their career or education. What can success mean to different people? What is your view of success?

Success
in
life
is something
that is
very important for most
people
. But
success
can mean different things. For some
people
success
is for your
job
,
others
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for others
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your personal
life
. I think that
the
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success
is very important and it is a mix of these. For some
people
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success
for
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your
job
is your
salary
. If you earn a high
salary
then
you are
success
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person. The
job
is not as important as the
salary
. Other
people
think that
success
in
job
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a job
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is what you do. If you do your
job
very well
then
it is a
success
.
For
example
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a teacher might help lots of students to get good exams and have good results at school
then
the teacher is
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a success
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success
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successful
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but some
people
say the
salary
is small. I think if you enjoy your
working
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work
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then
you are
success
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successful
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in your
job
.
On the other hand
, for other
people
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,people
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success
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succeed
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in
life
is in your personal
life
. If you have a marriage happily and
also
family
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a family
the family
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that
are
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is
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happy
then
this
is
also
success
.
Success
is not only your
job
but
also
personal feelings. In
conclusion
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I think that
success
is a mixture of different things and
success
it
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is different for other
people
. I think that if you have a good
job
that is
enjoyable for you
then
this
is a
success
.
Also
if you have a good family
then
this
is
success
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a success
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. I think if your
job
is good enough to have the money you need for
family
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your family
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then
this
is the best
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  • fulfillment
  • personal goals
  • happiness
  • career milestones
  • professional development
  • financial independence
  • security
  • philanthropy
  • contribution
  • personal development
  • recognition
  • work-life balance
  • self-improvement
  • well-being
  • subjective
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