Some people think government should invest more money in teaching science than other subjects in order for a country to develop and progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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plays a vital role
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country
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developing
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and process. Some people argued that the
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should invest more money in science and
technology
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subjects
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rather than other
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. In my point of
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the
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should
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focus on
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to
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develop
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. I will give
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in the ensuing paragraphs. On the one hand, in the modern era,
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innovation has
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spread in every field.
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countries
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have less
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equipment
as
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compered
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compared
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to developed
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.
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, the
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should invest more in teaching science
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in developing provinces. The
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sciences
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help to give job opportunity and its skills
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helps
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for
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overseas education.
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,
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science is
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the
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automation, so,
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production
would
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and
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rise income.
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,
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techonology
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technology
has improved agriculture industry
producation
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production
in India. The machinery takes
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by
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a human
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human
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humans
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. So,
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ratio would
increased
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.
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, income will
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significantly rise
, because,
producation
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production
and income are directly proportional to each other.
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developed
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need to improve
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cultural part of
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nation
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the nation
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, the developed
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's
government
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should invest in
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other
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such
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as
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history
,
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sports
and
that
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subjects
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which
attrect
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attract
to children. The developed
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had already advanced
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so, they focus on other
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.
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, the developed
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the USA had advancement in all
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fields
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people who
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in the USA
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do
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not know about
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histroy
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history
or
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culture of
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particular
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part of
continant
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continent
. In conclusion, the
ivest
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invest
in particular
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part which depend on
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nation
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development. The
government
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should invest in
education
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the education
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sector that
grow
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nation
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the nation
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. While
,
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apply
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the
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developing
country
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need to know about
technology
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by teaching science
in
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schooling time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innovation
  • economic growth
  • holistic development
  • technological advancements
  • critical thinking
  • cultural awareness
  • sustainable development
  • return on investment (ROI)
  • global competitiveness
  • job market
  • equitable education
  • funding allocation
  • curriculum balance
  • civic responsibilities
  • interdisciplinary approach
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