The internet has a bigger impact on people’s lives because it is more popular than television. Do you agree or disagree?

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Up when I was scrolling through my Instagram homepage. At

first

, I thought

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Up just provided valuable content that talked about stuff we need for preparing ourselves before applying for a job. When I scrolled around

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Up’s website, I found that there are so many programmes that

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Up offers to university students, one of them is

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(

Skill

Competition

Academy: Learn and Escalate).

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is a program that focuses on helping university students who want to join

business

case

competitions but have no idea how to do it.

This

programme offers

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mentorship with a great mentor. I am really grateful that there is a platform that provides mentoring for

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Competition

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. I am sure that

this

is a big opportunity for me to escalate my

performa

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performance

in the

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Competition

. From seeing the

contents

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content

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Skill

Up’s Instagram and

also

knowing

people

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behind

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Up, I can tell that being a mentee

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Skill

Up is

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right decision for me. My objective

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joining

SCALE

is I want to get guidelines on how to start

business

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a business

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study. Since I’m very beginning at

this

competition

, it is really confusing

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for me

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because I do not know what I should do

first

. I

also

hope that I can get partners who want to collaborate with me for joining

this

competition

since I see that there are so many BCC that require 3 people minimum for joining

but

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(

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papa

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beda univ). The good thing is

this

programme

also

gives us a chance to imply insights that we have got from 3 months

mentoring

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of mentoring

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by joining

business

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a business

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simulation . With

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, I believe that I can enhance my potential.

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