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n some countries, secondary school aims to provide a general education across a range of subjects. In others, children focus on a narrow range of subjects related to a particular career. Which do you think is appropriate in today’s world?

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The two pie graphs illustrate the result of leisure and cultural activities in
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 and
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 have participated Overall, The
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 are more interested in computer games and
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very minimum numbers of guys are interested in reading and the
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 are more into dancing activity and less in listening to music. In the
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 chart, we can observe that about 34% of
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 participate in computer games which
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 the leading the chart, on the
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 number they prefer basketball which is 26%. After that, soccer is chosen by 17% and almost the same number of
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 choose to listen to music and skateboarding there is just a difference of one
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 which is 10% and 11% and only 2% of
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 are interested in reading which is the least proportion from the all. In the
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 chart, we can see that
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 are more towards Dance, it is famous among 27% of
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, Following that 21% of them are in Reading, whereas only less number of
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 are interested in it.
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 are computer Games in which 16% of
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 have exercised and Netball, Gymnastics and listening to music are less famous among them which are 15%, 11%, and 10% respectively.
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