Some people think that the main purpose of school is to turn children into good citizens and workers rather than to benefit them as individuals to which extent do you agree or disagree?
to a certain
level
I agree that the role of Add a comma
,level
schools
is to prepare children to be more productive. However
, I also
believe that schools
have a positive impact on us as individuals.
Schools
mostly teach their students to be dedicating
workers in Change the form of the verb
dedicated
jobs
sectors. The Change the noun form
job
schools
curriculum Change to a genitive case
school's
schools'
concentrate
on improving some skills that are not Correct subject-verb agreement
concentrates
Change the adjective
necessarily
necessary
going to help us in the real world Replace the word
necessarily
such
as memorizing texts and definitions which is considerably
not the best approach Replace the word
considered
of
learning, Change preposition
to
Secondly
, most teachers criticize their pupils when they fail in their tests, ignoring that the essence of great success is great failings. This
may execute trepidation of failing when they are experiencing life as adults. Consequently
, less
opportunities will Change the quantifier
fewer
merged
Change the verb form
merge
be merged
to
them because they always avoid risk-taking as they assume to avoid failure, Change preposition
with
such
conception can be devastating for children in their life.
however
, schools
have a great impact overall in our life in terms of aspects like education and occupation. Society members may sometimes adopt and circulate the experience of some successful people and deal with it as role
Correct article usage
a role
not
an exceptional state, as they claim that most of the biggest successful people did not go to school, overlooking the millions of people that Add the comma(s)
,not
schools
was
a crucial component of their success Change the verb form
were
such
as becoming the CEO of a particular company. Another interesting thing is that most of the jobs in the last
century requires
qualifications and Correct subject-verb agreement
require
the
Correct article usage
apply
schools
certification is the most important among them.
in conclusion, the methodology used in teaching children should be optimized to align the real-world demands. Change to a genitive case
school's
schools'
Although
schools
have a beneficial effect on the
society and Correct article usage
apply
the
individuals.Correct article usage
apply
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