Some people think that the main purpose of school is to turn children into good citizens and workers rather than to benefit them as individuals to which extent do you agree or disagree?

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I agree that the role of
schools
is to prepare children to be more productive.
However
, I
also
believe that
schools
have a positive impact on us as individuals.
Schools
mostly teach their students to be
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workers in
jobs
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sectors. The
schools
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curriculum
concentrate
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on improving some skills that are not
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necessary
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going to help us in the real world
such
as memorizing texts and definitions which is
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not the best approach
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learning,
Secondly
, most teachers criticize their pupils when they fail in their tests, ignoring that the essence of great success is great failings.
This
may execute trepidation of failing when they are experiencing life as adults.
Consequently
,
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opportunities will
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them because they always avoid risk-taking as they assume to avoid failure,
such
conception can be devastating for children in their life.
however
,
schools
have a great impact overall in our life in terms of aspects like education and occupation. Society members may sometimes adopt and circulate the experience of some successful people and deal with it as
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an exceptional state, as they claim that most of the biggest successful people did not go to school, overlooking the millions of people that
schools
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a crucial component of their success
such
as becoming the CEO of a particular company. Another interesting thing is that most of the jobs in the
last
century
requires
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qualifications and
the
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schools
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certification is the most important among them. in conclusion, the methodology used in teaching children should be optimized to align the real-world demands.
Although
schools
have a beneficial effect on
the
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society and
the
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individuals.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial
  • shaping
  • developing
  • unique talents
  • potential
  • well-rounded
  • academic
  • social
  • emotional development
  • personal growth
  • contribute positively
  • self-expression
  • creativity
  • individuality
  • happier and more fulfilled
  • strike a balance
  • preparing students for the workforce
  • nurturing
  • individual needs
  • pursue passions and interests
  • thrive
  • future professionals
  • community institutions
  • shape community values
  • foster civic engagement
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