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Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governmnents must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Nowadays, many countries expend a lot of
money
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 on cultural development. Many
people
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 think that government should use the
money
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 for the public interest
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 as
health
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 policies and other basic needs
instead
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 of cultural
investment
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. I surely agreed with
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 statement and here I will discuss
this
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 aspect. On the one hand, cultural diversity is the characteristic of a nation that may represent its existence in the
world
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. But, before going for
investment
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 governments should give priority to
health
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 benefits as many states in the
world
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 have not had enough economic support.
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, most African nations are facing
health
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 problems. So, they need medical benefits
instead
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 of cultural ones.
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, Governments are not able to provide the basic
health
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 need of the
people
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 due to a shortage of
money
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. In these circumstances, it is not possible to invest currency in cultural activities.
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,
people
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 are concerned about their basic needs in the modern
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. Most commonly, food and housing facilities should be provided by lawmakers.
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, Many
people
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 in Congo pass their lives to hunger and homelessness. Charitable organization of the
world
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 seeking hands to save these
people
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. In
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 situation,
investment
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 in cultural development is useless and a waste of
money
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instead
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. In conclusion, Government should emphasize a priority basis when thinking to go for
investment
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.
Investment
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 in arts should be done after ensuring public services
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 as the
health
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, food, and housing safety of the
people
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.
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, it seems to affect seriously
people
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's life.
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