In some countries, governments provide payments for unemployed people. How does this impact people? Is this a positive or negative development?

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The discussion that granting funds from the government to
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sector of
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surely poses a question of its true overall impact exactly on its
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. In my opinion, I side towards the positive outcomes that
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trend could reflect over a
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progress.
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essay delves into both the benefits and detriments
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policy. One clear fact is that unemployment brings
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economy. There could be
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disruption in
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revenue if funds are directed towards the same group of
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. To
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illustrate, major revenue to a country is obtained from its taxpayers, loss of jobs decreases
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income to the
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government
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adds more burden to them if the
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channel some amount to the
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doers.
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it impacts the other sector of
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in terms of increased
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GST
and income tax etc..on other
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who are employed.
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could be turned
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negative
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trend could
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make
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the unemployed
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group
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and
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procrastinating
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which can incur a major effect on the government in future.
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,
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acknowledging
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regulation can bring, it has its own benefits.
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monetary benefit not only supports the individuals
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but offers protection to their families financially. Take
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instance,
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could become
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homeless
, and suffer in all aspects of life if they
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a
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and if the person who lost the
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is the only person earning in the family.
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,
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uncertainties
can arise at any time, in
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hardship, these funds from
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could enlighten their lives. Overall, taking both the strong viewpoints into consideration, I
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towards the good impact
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a policy could bring on the lives of mankind and
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with
people
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in
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difficult times would
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reduce various health implications that a loss of
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job
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can cause.
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governing bodies should delegate certain guidelines for the judicious usage of money and act in the best
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interest
of the entire nation.
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