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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There has been a significant increase in the number of
vehicles
 on British roads from 1881 to 2000. It's often argued that encouraging to use
alternative
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forms
 of
transport
 and initiating international laws to control car ownership and uses is advantageous.
First
 of all, I believe that a high volume of
vehicles
 on the roads over time could
adversly
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adversely
 affect humans and the environment. Over the years the rates of air, water and soil pollution have increased due to greenhouse gas emissions and oil leaks from
vehicles
 and
on the other
hand
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 there is a significant increase in the number of road traffic accidents. In my opinion,
few
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a few
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 ways in which we can urge people to use alternative
forms
 of
transport
 is by introducing new transportation
forms
such
 as monorails and underground metro etc. and making the existing public
transport
 more comfortable and accessible to people of all ages in both urban and rural areas. At the same time initiating international laws to control car ownership and uses would be of great help to overcome the previously mentioned issues. To conclude, I strongly believe it is highly beneficial to have less number of
vehicles
 on roads by encouraging people to use alternative
forms
 of
transport
 in order to save humans and
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mother nature from the adverse effects of greenhouse gas emissions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliance on
  • regulate
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • public health
  • sustainable development
  • alternative forms of transport
  • car ownership
  • balancing benefits and drawbacks
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