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Academic Writing Task 1 #21 Process and Cycle – Produce Electricity

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The flow chart provided depicts the process of using rain to produce electricity. There are three parts of
Hydro-electric
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Hydroelectric
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 power generation, including collecting the
water
, through machine transferring
water
 to electronic and distributing the electronic to the building.
Firstly
, the diagram shows that evaporation is caused by the sun's heat and becomes a cloud
then
 when the cloud cannot afford the weight it will rain. While
rain fall
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rainfall
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, it will collect in a reservoir and is controlled by a dam to release the
water
.
Second
, the
water
 will flow to the turbine through the valve that can control opening and closing, which can let the
water
 flow to the pump and the pump can pump the
water
 to the reservoir.
This
 is a cycle to produce electric power.
Finally
, the electric can through high voltage cables sends the power to the transformer station. The electricity is delivered by underground cables to domestic, factory, hospitals and schools.
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