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Mostly the popular issue in metropolitan areas is traffic jam since many people prefer to live in this place to get better life. Because of this issue there are any two problems that give bad impact in the earth , but there have two solutions to tackle these problems.

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Mostly the popular issue in metropolitan areas is
traffic
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jam
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jams
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 since many
people
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 prefer to live in
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this place
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these places
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 to get
better
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a better
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 life. Because of
this
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issue
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,issue
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 there are
any
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two problems that give
bad
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a bad
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 impact
in
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on
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 the earth , but there have two solutions to tackle these problems. On the one hand, the
increasing
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 of
traffic
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 congestion is because many
people
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 like to live in the urban areas and
mostly
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most
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people
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 have their own vehicle. The common reason
of
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for
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 the increasing
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people
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number of people
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migrate
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migrating
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in
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to
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the
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big cities is that they want to get a better job.
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, since
people
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 who live in
large
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a large
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city
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cities
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 may have good
salary
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salaries
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 it makes
them
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it them
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 easy to buy private vehicles.
Motorcycle
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Motorcycles
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 and
car
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cars
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,
for instance
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, are the popular private transportations that they have in every home.
By
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With
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 credit
card
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cards
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 and the guarantee of
people
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’s salaries,
people
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 can get their private vehicles easily.
However
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, because of
these
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this problem
these problems
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problem
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 the earth is hotter than in the past and fossil fuel is decreasing.
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, to solve
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this
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these
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issues
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issue
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government
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the government
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 have to make a clear role as well as to make
convenient
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it convenient
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 of the public transportations.
Government
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 can make a role
about
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in
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 migration that
people
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 want to live from rural
area
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areas
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 to big
city
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cities
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.
Moreover
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,
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government
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the government
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also
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 facilitate
people
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 who live in
countryside
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the countryside
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 to get a good job.
Furthermore
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, to decrease of using
private
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a private
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vehicle
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vehicles
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,
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government
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the government
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 can facilitate
a
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comfortable public transportation.
Therefore
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,
people
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 who live in
the
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apply
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urban areas may
be prefer
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prefer
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 to transport by public transportation rather than
their
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apply
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private transportation. To sum up,
traffic
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jam
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jams
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 is causing
people
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like
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to like
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 to migrate
in
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to
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 large cities and
usually
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,usually
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 they have their private
vehicle
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vehicles
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.
As a result
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 of the
traffic
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congestion
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,congestion
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 the earth will hotter than in the past and the extinction of fossil
fuel
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fuels
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.
However
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, to tackle these problem
government
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 have
the
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apply
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essential
roles
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role
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.

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