Nowadays, more and more older people who need employment compete with the younger people for the same job. What problem this causes? What are solution?

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In recent years, young
job
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seekers are in competition with the old whose number of them is increasing for
similar
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occupation
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. Since
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situation has
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on young
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s life, a mutual agreement between
companies
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and
universities
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to provide courses that
students
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can work as a trainee in
companies
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for a while is beneficial not only for
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but
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companies
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which I will explain in detail as follows: Young
people
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have some difficulties in finding
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a job
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job
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jobs
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for which the old apply.
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is to say that in an inequivalent condition in which employees show more tendency to employ skilled workers, elders have more chance to hold a position. As the demand for
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the job
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job
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jobs
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by older
people
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is higher than ever, the less experienced
people
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should be lucky to be offered
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which
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same
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elder’s
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.
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, in spite of having
university
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education, they have to accept dead-end
jobs
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offers like
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a waitress
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, salesperson, and so on.
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, They might walk away from dissatisfied
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by either dropping out
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universities
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or committing a crime
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as using illegal drugs or becoming theft which has detrimental influences on
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health. When it comes to
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a solution
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solution
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,
cooperation
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the cooperation
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of
universities
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and
companies
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could be an effective way to tackle these problems. What I mean to say is that
universities
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with
assistance
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of
companies
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can enforce a law on which
students
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should work for
companies
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as an intern during their education years to gain practical experience. In
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way, a large number of
students
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might be recruited by
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in which they finish their internment;
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, a young person who
become
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expert
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in their major even have more opportunity to take a
job
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in comparison to older
people
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. In conclusion, in
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competitive unequal environment in which the old’s requirements for occupations
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becoming high, there are some major concerns for young graduates in terms of working which influence their future in a negative way.
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