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The pie charts illustrate the result of a survey of
leisure
activities
 and culture for both children girls and boys. Generally, girl children have the highest spending on
leisure
activities
 on dancing, but boy children’s spending on
leisure
activities
 are highest on computer gaming. The
first
 graph shows boys’ cultural and
leisure
activities
. The
second
 highest spending time is basketball at 26%.
In addition
, listening to music and skateboarding ate have approximately the same percentage. Reading is the least
leisure
 activity at 2%.
Furthermore
, soccer has 17% of boys’ cultural and
leisure
activities
.
On the other hand
, girls’ culture has almost double reading than listening to music, but still dancing is the highest percentage than other
activities
,
also
 listening to music and gymnastics are approximately the same percentage at 10% and 11% respectively.
In addition
, netball and computer games are nearly the same.
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