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Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph shows information regarding the percentage of
sales
 for four different kinds of musical instruments from 2008 to 2021. In an overview, guitars were more popular in comparison to the rest and pianos had the least percentage of
sales
.
Although
 there were few differences in the number of drums and trumpets that were sold, on
an
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average,
sales
 followed a declining trend for all the instruments.
Firstly
, looking at guitars there were about 16% in 2008-2009, which raised steadily over the period of 5 years and
it
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reaches a peak in 2016-17 (23%),
this
 eventually followed a downward trend by the end of 2021 reaching about 11%.
Secondly
, drums had the highest
sales
 during 2014-15 (13%), while the least
of
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about 6 % in 2010-11.
Furthermore
, trumpets and pianos exceptionally had a downfall over the years and by the end
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2021
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 they had
sales
 of about 5% and 4% respectively.
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