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Many countries have compulsory military service for young men after they leave school. It would be a good idea for all countries to adopt this system for men, and possibly for women too. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Many
countries
 oblige young men to serve in the military for a period of time, and some
people
 suggest that
such
 ‘national
service
’ should be extended to all
countries
 and possibly for both genders. I would argue that
although
 military
service
 is beneficial to some it may not be suitable for everybody- and so should not be obligatory.
However
, I see no reason why anyone who wishes to serve should be prevented from doing so, regardless of whether man or woman. The argument most often advanced in favour of universal military
service
 is that it increases the skill set of young
people
, who are forced to face challenges and see the benefits of discipline and training. Some
people
 even go
further
 in favour and argue that obligatory military
service
 would help to tackle youth disorder which is a growing problem in many Western
countries
. They
also
 say that if young
people
 were to serve some time in the military in different parts of the country to their home town, and with others who are
also
 from different regions,
then
this
 camaraderie would add to a sense of national unity and cohesion, and prove beneficial to society as a whole.
On the other hand
, critics argue that these ‘benefits’ are illusory. They say there is no real advantage in merely wasting time which could be more usefully spent
otherwise
, that it leads to the militarization of youth, and that not all
countries
 need a large and expensive military presence anyway.
Finally
, they question how appropriate it would be to force
otherwise
 peaceful
people
 into the military. There are alternatives to military
service
, though they are less common internationally.
Instead
, young
people
 could take part in community
service
 programmes after leaving school.
This
 would still help to develop various skills in the same manner as military
service
 does while making the young
people
 involved feel that they have an investment in their country and in improving the community in which they live. I would argue that
this
 kind of
service
 would be far more suitable for both men and women, as well as beneficial to society at large. To conclude, while military
service
 does have clear benefits there are
also
 some negative aspects related to how ethical it is to force
people
 to serve in the armed forces. For
this
 reason, I would argue that there are other ways of developing young
people
’s skills.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Compulsory
  • Military service
  • Conscription
  • Patriotism
  • National security
  • Social equality
  • Discipline
  • Physical fitness
  • Life skills
  • Job training
  • Infringement
  • Conscripts
  • Gender equality
  • Mandatory
  • Economy
  • Education system
  • Labor market
  • Civil service
  • Alternative forms
  • Balanced view
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