Scientest agree that people are damaging their health by eating too much junk food. Some people think that the answer to this problem is to educate people. Others think that education will not work. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The modern generation lives in time-pressed culture.
As a result
, fast food has gained enormous popularity , especially, in cityscapes. Despite knowing the side effects, the masses are still consuming convenient food fearlessly. If ever there is some awareness strategy by the government or NGOs(Non -governmental organisations), people would, still, happily trade off health for time.
This
has been proven in past experiences as well that authorities devised strategies against certain substance abuse, but , unfortunately, all remained in vain. Take smoking as an example. Even after advertising about disastrous health issues due to smoking, the sales of cigarettes never dropped.
Therefore
, education can only give awareness about the pros and cons while consumption is purely at disposal of consumers, and most probably they would not be deterred.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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