In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this. Give reasons for your answer and include any examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Youngsters in some societies give a chance by education systems to have a job or go abroad before
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teenagers can get numerous knowledge and experiences by travelling and working. At
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, by working, youth learn many ideas about different professions.
This
information could help them to choose the future study field in the university based on their experiences.
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, going abroad
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them a chance to improve their vision
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the world.
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, they get to know a new culture, make new friends, and learn a new language.
On the other hand
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Firstly
, a gap between studies can cause some major courses to be forgotten.
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students which study science fields like physics or mathematics after a year without practice and
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their lessons may face
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with their new courses in university.
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, being far from home could cause some emotional issues for young generations special for whom which have more dependency on their family. In conclusion, there are some positive effects including improve experiences and gaining new data by
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a gap year for students before entering
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university.
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the drawbacks of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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