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Some people think that schools should select pupils according to their academic abilities, while others believe that it is better to have pupils with different abilities study together. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #schools #pupils #abilities #study
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some
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that
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 their own interests, yet there are others who believe that
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separated
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 and study with other
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the same
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 interests. On the one hand, educating
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people
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have
 similar
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 give
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 different types of perspectives or diversity. Exchange or seeing ideas gives
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such
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of
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perspectives about their own subject.
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, if a student were interested in sculpture,
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 student would
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 by his/her friends who
interest
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 in arts. There
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also
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 some kind of negative effects
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 as especially in Turkey, some
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 can be much more important than the other subjects and
this
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 can be a problem among the students.
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 that, as a positive effect, interaction with people
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 same
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with
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 you will raise our ability. On the other side of the argument say that
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 same classes
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 other
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 who have different academic
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Separating
 all the subjects will be a problem in terms of
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foundation
 because
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a
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different places
fort he
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for the
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 subjects or recruiting teachers
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 the job can
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cause
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economic problems. If all the
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same
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 interests
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the
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 similar topic,
whereas
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teachers give better attention to every
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. Above all,
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abilities
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 can feed and learn from each other. In my opinion, I agree
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that
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study together with
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interest
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