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1. These days, people work in more than one job, and often change career several times during their life. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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Nowadays, it's very impossible to discover the ideal job for you based on your qualifications. Due to
this
 issue, the unemployment rate has emerged as one of the most significant problems, and
as a result
, individuals began to hold multiple
jobs
 or switch
careers
, which had an impact on their ability to manage work and personal obligations. I'll go over both the advantages and disadvantages of
this
 circumstance in
this
 essay.
First
 off, I firmly believe that doing several
jobs
 can be harmful to your health and that changing
careers
 is not always the wisest course of action.
For instance
, starting a
second
 shift at night after working from morning to evening can disrupt your circadian rhythm and may
also
 result in excruciating body discomfort. On the other side,
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 a career change that may need you to start over.
For instance
, if you studied chemistry and are currently employed as one, but decided to change
careers
 owing to low pay, you can end up choosing banking without any prior experience or training.
Second
, if you are convinced that changing your career will benefit you and you know how things will work if you do, I will
also
 advise you to do it. We never know what might be advantageous to us or from whom an opportunity might come. I used a chemist as an example, but you are willing to face any problems the banking industry has, and you are aware of how the system functions, so you should go for it. I
also
 think that you should hunt for
jobs
 as much as you can when you're a young adult. Because it will both aid in your financial gain and serve as a lesson in "how to expand your contacts," and “how the world works” which will
also
 help to build interpersonal and communication skills. After carefully weighing all the arguments, I should conclude that switching
careers
 is only an option if you are certain of the outcome before making the switch and if it will be for the better.
Additionally
, if you are young and want to gain experience in a few different industries, you should try several
jobs
 that won't harm your health.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Skill diversification
  • Versatile
  • Professional network
  • Career advancement
  • Job satisfaction
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Market value
  • Job insecurity
  • Financial strain
  • Specialization
  • Adjustment periods
  • Unemployment
  • Deep expertise
  • Long-term benefits
  • Retirement plans
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