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Consider a situation where you are asked by your supervisor to participate in a group project at work. Your supervisor wants you to work with someone who has opinions that are very different than yours. Moreover, they feel very strongly about these opinions. Do you think that working with this person is a good idea?

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 is something important.
However
, In some
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situation
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 you need to
work
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someone
 who
completely
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 unlike you. In my
opinion
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 I completely disagree with
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 with who has thoughts various different than you. I will explain my viewpoints in detail in the ensuing paragraph.
Firstly
,
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 with
someone
 not like you in
thoughts
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your thoughts
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 may be difficult.
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, they have to follow your policy,
some
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 of them may
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not follow the policy. So in
this
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 you will fire
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 does not follow the policy.
Moreover
, if
someone
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 to study
a
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medicine and his father does not agree with him,
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he
want
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 him an engineer
,
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 because he is
an
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engineering
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. The boy will not be happy when he
studing
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studying
studied
a
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medicine, and he will fail. because it is not his choice. And not what he
want
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.It is clear that working with
somone
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someone
 like your thought is better.
Furthermore
, if
someone
 like
the
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reading, and
other
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others
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 want him to
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 up with them, he will not be happy to go outside، because he thought he will waste his time rather than read a good book. It is apparent that
work
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 in grouping with the same thinking is preferable. In conclusion, working in
group
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 with the same thought is better and more preferable than different, it's predicted that working with
same
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the same
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 thinking is more
achivement
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achievement
.
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