Consider a situation where you are asked by your supervisor to participate in a group project at work. Your supervisor wants you to work with someone who has opinions that are very different than yours. Moreover, they feel very strongly about these opinions. Do you think that working with this person is a good idea?

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you need to
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unlike you. In my
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I completely disagree with
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may be difficult.
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of them may
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not follow the policy. So in
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you will fire
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does not follow the policy.
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to study
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medicine and his father does not agree with him,
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he
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him an engineer
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because he is
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engineering
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. The boy will not be happy when he
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medicine, and he will fail. because it is not his choice. And not what he
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.It is clear that working with
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someone
like your thought is better.
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reading, and
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want him to
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up with them, he will not be happy to go outside، because he thought he will waste his time rather than read a good book. It is apparent that
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in grouping with the same thinking is preferable. In conclusion, working in
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with the same thought is better and more preferable than different, it's predicted that working with
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thinking is more
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