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Success is often measured in term of how much money somebody has earned. Do you think wealth is a good measure of success? How else could we measure whether somebody is successful or not?

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Wealth is
one
 of the factors to determine success though not the only
one
. There are several other important parameters based on which success is measured. I believe,
one
 must consider all the stepping stones a person has climbed in order to reach where he is today. A newspaper delivery boy who on a daily basis puts in
effort
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 to deliver newspapers to every single house
,
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also
 learns from his own methods to achieve
this
 task in order to improve his skills to manage his time effectively.
For example
, he can design a model based on which he can deliver the paper faster and
thus
 save 5 minutes on an everyday basis.
That is
 approximately 2.5 hrs of savings in a month.
Similarly
, there are many areas where
one
 can explore to improve their skills. Success must be measured by where
one
 is today compared to yesterday.
Such
 small improvements can lead the person to greater heights.
Hence
, according to me, accomplishment means good health, wealth, progress and kindness. The lack of any of them would mean a failure to me.
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