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Many children these days have their own mobile phones what are the advantage and disadvantage of it.

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A study shows, about more than 25% of today's children aged between 7 and 14 have their own mobile phone.
This
 is mainly due to the additional classes they have enrolled on and having a device helps them to coordinate with their parents. There are many features that can be used for safety purposes.
For example
, sharing current location, emergency contacts, video calling etc.
Furthermore
, they can make use of search engines for content for their assignments and projects. On the flip side, the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. One major disadvantage of having their personal handheld device is the addiction to using the phone constantly. Children
also
 can misuse the internet for other inappropriate searches. Social media bullying is the topmost concern in a survey conducted recently.
Nevertheless
, parents can install applications to restrict internet usage and monitor the sites they recently visited. Technology always poses a threat to all generations, if not used correctly. I hereby conclude that wise usage of the devices can be a boon to children and parents play an important role in
this
.
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