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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task。Write about the following topic：Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed，rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case？What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed？Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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In recent times,
people
 are deciding to pick to be self-employed rather than
to
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work for
the
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an
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 organization due to a plethora
reasons
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of reasons
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. In
this
 essay, I will elaborate on the beneficial aspects of
this
 trend and
thus
 lead to a logical conclusion. There are
profilic
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prolific
profiles
 points to agree with the meritorious side.
First
 of all, being self-employed can set own working hours schedule and
to
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apply
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spend quality with family and friends.Another positive outlook in
this
 regard is that more chance of gaining more salary rather than
work
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working
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 in the organization.
As a result
, we can easily get
settle
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settled
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 down in the early stage of
the
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our
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 career.Needless to say, all the points stand in
a
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good stead.
By contrast
, it is predicted that
thrones
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the thrones
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 of the area cannot be neglected. The most worrying
aspects
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aspect
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 is lack of the resources
in
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for
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the
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apply
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industrialization which directly affect
country's
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the country's
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 economy. Another observation in
this
 regard is that
people
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if people
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are not enrich
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are not enriched
are not enriching
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knowledge
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in knowledge
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 in
the
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a
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 particular field, more chance
losing
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of losing
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 all
the
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their
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 financial money in business. They always worry about
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the consequence
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consequence
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consequences
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 of the results. Based on
the
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these
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 points, the pitfall of being
self employed
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self-employed
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 is lucid. To conclude
that
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apply
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, individual as self-employed deal with
death
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the death
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 line of the business which
lead
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leads
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 to more mental stress and
end
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ends
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 up with debt.
However
,
people
 who are creative and
innotive
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innovative
 provide
opporunites
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opportunities
opportunity
 to get settle down in the early stage of
the
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their
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 career and decrease
gap
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the gap
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with
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between
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 rich and poor
people
.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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