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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task。Write about the following topic：Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed，rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case？What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed？Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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In recent times,
increasing
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 number of an individual choose to
be
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work for themselves rather than work for
a companies
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companies
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 due to
plethora
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 of reasons.
In addition
,
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the bank
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bank
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banks
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also
 provided
efficient
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the efficient
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amount
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amounts
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 of
loan
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loans
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 to people who needed to start a
businness
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business
. In
this
 essay, I will elaborate on the beneficial and adverse aspects of
this
 trend before coming to a final conclusion. There are prolific points to agree with the meritorious reasons.
First
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 and Foremost reason is people
has
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liberty
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the liberty
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 to choose
own
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their own
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 schedules and working hours to start their work. Another observation in
this
 regard is that an individual can able to spend quality time with family and friends.
Further
, if an employee doesn’t perform well or if the employer feels that the employee isn’t worthy enough, they can be expelled from the company.
Furthermore
, there are no rules and regulations and more chance of earning more money. Needless to say, all these points stand in good stead.
By contrast
, it is predicted that the thrones of
this
 area cannot be neglected. The most worrying aspect is an individual didn't meet the project deadlines,
may
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and may
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 undergo financial losses.
Moreover
, entrepreneurship needs to deal with many problems day by day.
As a result
, they end up with mental stress.
Besides
, it takes several years for self-employed professionals to establish themselves in their respective fields.Based on these points, the pitfall of self-employment is lucid. In conclusion, I think working for oneself is definitely beneficial which enable to set their own terms and condition.
However
, they should be aware of the pros and cons of self-employment before venturing into one.
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