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My
parents
 set a time for me to come
home
 in the evenings. They expect me to be
home
 at 9 p.m. I have asked them to give me a later curfew as I want to spend more time with my friends, but they don’t agree.
Last
 night, I attended a wonderful birthday party at a friend’s house. The party was so great that I forgot the curfews. My
parents
 were very upset, and they kept calling me. I asked them to allow me to stay there a little bit later.
However
, they said that if I did not come back
home
 right away, they could go to my friend’s house and pick me up. It was very embarrassing when I had to say goodbye to my friends, but I had no choice. My
parents
 were unreasonable; it was a birthday, and they could be flexible and let me come back
home
 later than the curfew time they set. I wish that my
parents
 could allow me to stay out until 10 p.m. How can I make my
parents
 change their
mind
Fix the agreement mistake
minds
show examples
?
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