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some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate school. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed shool.

#people #boys #girls #school #benefit #shool
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 in separate
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 is better.
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, a lot of people believe that more
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of
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gender
 educate together. In
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 will offer my opinion
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the
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inclusion. Some of the reasons that people prefer different
school
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 are as follows.
First
 of all, it can help children focus
to
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,
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girl
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 not need
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their
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 appearance
such
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, dress up and find
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 way to compete with others to
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 the boy.
In addition
, it can make the facilities simplify and streamlined. An example of
this
,
only
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 one type of bathroom and changing rooms are required.
Besides
 that,
however
, mixing
of
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two
gender
study
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studies
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 in co-educated
school
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schools
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 is more
benefit
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.
Initially
, both sexes should
treated
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 equally in
ecucation
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education
 or life.
For instance
, if your children learn in mixed class where your kids are received
lession
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lessons
 the same for all
gender
this
 promote
equall
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equal
 competition.
Secondly
, learning together helps students see and solve various different problems like real life that encourage them
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 about skills
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in life
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life
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 in the future.
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, male students can learn how to
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with
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another
gender
 in many situations
such
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, girls often harder study than boys
that
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 helps all boys students feel
embarrassing
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 and
having
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motivation
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 to learn. In conclusion, in my
opinion
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i
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I
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 feel that the advantage of
mixed
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a mixed
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school
 outweigh than
separate
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a separate
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class
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with
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 some reasons
i
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 have outlined above.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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