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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Face to face communication is better than the other types of communication,such as letters,e-mail, or telephone calls. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

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According to the COVID-19 situation, People's lifestyle of
communication
 has changed. There are many methods
such
 as letters , e-mail , video conferences or telephone ,which we rarely see each other.I totally agree that face-to-face
communication
 is better than the other types. Nowadays, Everyones use the internet for their work and
also
take
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this
 advantage to create an online meeting that can be remote from a far distance.
However
, it has some
weakness
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weaknesses
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.
For example
 , If you are sitting in a room with
have
Unnecessary verb
apply
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a bad signal
of
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from
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internet
Correct article usage
the internet
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 , it could make your conversation delayed or disconnect from your speaker. Cannot deny it is so convenient but have to trade off something for that. Face-to-face
communication
 doesn't take risk of the network. Real-time response is a good method of conversation. And
also
 the emotion of speaker wants to show to the listener can show up in front of their sight in the meeting. Including the motion of the speaker. To summarize,
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virtual meeting is more convenient than face-to-face
communication
 but have some disadvantage. In my view, the clear conversation and emotion want to
delivery
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deliver
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 to an audience can be found in the
real person
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real-person
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 meeting method.
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