In order to study at university students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all student can afford them so somr think that university education should be free. Do you agree or disagree?

In today's world, every young
individuals
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are keen on
acquire
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acquiring
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university
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a university
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education in their country or oversea.
However
,
higher ranking
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universities
which are situated
on
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abroad required extremely big figures from students. I partly agree with
this
statement. In
this
essay, I will illustrate the pros and cons of
university
policy based on my point of view and support it with examples as well.
To begin
with, most
universities
define independently their admission process and tuition capital.
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Ones
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mainly are interested in annual money which is
requirement
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a requirement
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from
university
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the university
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throught
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through
throughout
thought
enrollment.
Hence
families who stay
on
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in
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low
privilaged
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privileged
classes cannot accomplish
this
occasion. These fees depend on distinctive opportunities which
universities
can provide for their students
such
as top-notch technology, labs and library. On the flip side, from my
perpective
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perspective
, if
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
decline some protocols to free education at
university
for all
of
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the privilage
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privilage
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privileged
classes, that implementation can affect positively to society.
Firstly
,
young
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the young
a young
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individual
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individuals
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will want to make a choice to study
university
which offers affordable money in their country.
Therefore
,
brain
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drain will be
reducing
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considerably and can be avoided unemployment problems.
Moreover
,
universities
can appeal
international
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to international
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student
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students
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from other countries. In the nutshell, as a matter of
fact
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,fact
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university
education has to be free to more effectively upbringing adults and progressive economical development of
country
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the country
a country
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.
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