Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmenatal problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The bar chart illustrates the
earning
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from exports in a country in five categories (
petroleum
products
, engineered goods, germs and jewellery, agricultural
products
, and textiles) in the years 2015 and 2016, while the table compares the values of these
products
in percentage between both years. Overall, it is clearly shown that the export
earnings
in 2016 outraced in all categories in comparison to 2015, with the exception of germs and jewellery.
In addition
, the most significant amount of money earns from
petroleum
products
, while the least percentage of
earnings
comes from textiles in both years. The export
earnings
of
petroleum
products
accounted for around $60
billions
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in 2015, which increased to 3% in 2016 at approximately $63
billions
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, and it was the biggest
earnings
among others. Engineering goods, which comprised about $58
billions
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in 2015,
it
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rose to 8.5% in 2016,
increased
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more than double in comparison with
petroleum
products
. In 2015 the
earning
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from gems and jewellery exporting to other countries
was
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almost $42
billions
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, it fell to 5.18% in 2016 at around $40
billions
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and it was the only declining
values
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value
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of exports in 2016.
However
, agriculture
products
and textiles
was
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made up approximately $31
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billion
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billions
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and $25
billions
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respectively in 2015, and these
products
’ values remained unchanged in 2016 at around $30
billions
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billion
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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