Some people like to try new new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your opinion.

It is
debated
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topic of
today's
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that
folks
are
explore
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exploring
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new
things
such
as
places
, types of dishes and daily chores. While, some
people
argued that new
things
are
time consuming
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time-consuming
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therefore
, they keep doing which familiar
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them. I will discuss both viewpoints and give my opinion in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin
with, there are numerous benefits
of
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people
who explore
thier
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their
life.
Firstly
, they learn
value
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the value
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of different cultures and languages which helps
to
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people
growths
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.
Secondly
,
folks
who travelled
different
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countries that they more experienced in every field. Nowadays, most
of
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young
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the young
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people
like to explore and
they
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learn about
there
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their
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culture and languages.
For example
, it can
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a survery
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survery
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survey
of these
people
who try new
things
that
they
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80% of
folks
satisfy with
experience
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their experience
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.
Moreover
, the main benefits of
people
try
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trying
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new adventures activity which they will find their passion in exploration.
For instance
,
in
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the age of 20s
juvenile
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confused
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are confused
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to
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about
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future
career
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so, they
try
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explore their skills and find
their
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right path
of
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for
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future
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the future
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.
On the other hand
, some individuals
arged
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argued
argue
that keep doing these
things
which
is
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are
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know about merits and demerits.
Folks
has
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lack
of
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condifidance
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confidence
so, they do not explore their life .
In addition
, individuals have
experties
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expertise
on
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in
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the
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apply
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one
skills
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skill
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.So , they do not try new
things
. Illustrate, if a person has been
work
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working
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in
IT
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an IT
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company for 15 years, he /she
experts
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expert
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in that
sectors
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sector
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.
Therefore
, his/her does not explore new skills.
Furthermore
,
people
who experience new
things
which
places
and food in
different
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a different
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country
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countries
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. But some
places
and food in
different
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a different
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country. But, some
places
has
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have
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extremely
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and
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weather so they do not survey. In conclusion, today competition has increased . If a person
workhard
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work hard
works hard
for their
further
career they
also
explored
such
a
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apply
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things
. While, there are
also
some demerits of exploration
but
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apply
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,
i
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will agree will
former
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the former
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point of view.
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