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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people will think this lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world?

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It is true that tourism is
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developing
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these
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 becoming the most crucial
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 to be spoken globally .
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 if you know
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. Another advantage would be that
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business
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if only one
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 become most the  prominent in the
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renounce
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, it would result in the collapse of tourism because there would be no
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reason to
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all countries
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 and similar cultures.
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many countries
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tourism as
tourism
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 will be the most important
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 in the universe.
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 it has more advantages than disadvantages.
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