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Nowadays, many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can take care of their children, while others think childcare centers provide the best care. Discus both views and give your own opinion.

#families #parents #members #grandparents #care #children #childcare #centers #discus
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 days, most
parents
 are working and they want to best for their
children
. While some
parents
 ask
help
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for help
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 from their
parents
, others pay
to
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for
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childcare
centers
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centres
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. Both options have advantages and disadvantages. In my opinion,
childcare
centers
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 are more beneficial for
the
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children
. Most grandparents see their grandchild as their
child
 and
happy
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 to take care of them.
This
 is good for the family's economical situation because they don't pay
to
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their
parents
. They always do their best because they are relatives.
Also
, the
child
spend
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 time with his/her family so, family relations become stronger.
However
, sometimes grandparents might think they know best about raising a
child
 and they could be too emotional to critics. They sometimes don't pay attention to
parents
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 and do what they want.
This
 could be confusing for the
child
. To entrust kids to
childcare
service
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services
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 could be expensive but it's
worth
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itworth
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. Educated employees help
children
 to become more active and get smarter via playing educational games. These
centers
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 are using new scientific methods for education and it is more beneficial for the
children
.
Moreover
, a
child
 could make friends
in
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there and it's important to
playing
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 with peers.
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A child
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Child
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Children
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 could start to learn about basic school subjects
,
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 if they go to the
childcare
center
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centre
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. In conclusion, both options have negative and positive results. But if I were a parent, I would like to professional service for my
child
. Via scientific methods,
children
's
intelligent
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 could improve better.
Also
, kids learn to communicate with their peers.
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