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While studying abroad provides an opportunity to broaden one’s experience, as also present the danger of letting influence from the host culture. How far do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In recent years,the search
of
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 greener pastures has been a pandemic
trends
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.
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,
people
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tends
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 to travel to
the
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another country to acquire more knowledge and get exposed to different opportunities. Some
people
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 argue that
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 could have an impact
in
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one
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's
culture
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. I strongly disagree with
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 statement.
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, the value of
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 ethnic group plays an important role.
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, if
people
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 value their traditions, there won'
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 be any amount of pressure from other
society
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 that can
made
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 them deviate.
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, a family friend travelled to India for schooling, reaching there,she received a cultural shock but she adapted to their system and after 5years of studying she came back and continue her normal life. There is
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 that when you are in
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Rome, you
behaves
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 like Romans. She respected their
culture
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 and follows their traditions during the period of her stay but that didn'
t
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 change her beliefs about her customs.
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, there are good opportunities in traveling outside
one
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 geographical location but the influence of
culture
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 is
base
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 on personality.
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, it is if an individual
decide
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 to let other
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culture
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cultures
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have
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influence him because most countries won'
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forced
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 you in accepting their beliefs and customs but
one
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have
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 to respect
it
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 whilst they live there.
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,
one
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 who
traveled
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 may have a change in dialect due to constant communication or dressing due to change in weather but their traditions won'
t
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 be forced upon
because
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them because
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 everyone
have
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 their own belief. To sum up,
traveling
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travelling
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 to other countries have
giving
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given
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people
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 chances to gain different skills as well as opportunities they want to explore.
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,
one
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have
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 the choice to choose if they will be influenced
with
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 another
culture
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 or not.

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