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The best manager is one who is warm and friendly with their staff. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that those who are warm and friendly make the best managers. In the essay, I will discuss the reasons why some may think
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 way and
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, I will
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 elaborate and the other valuable traits that are required in a management position to explain why I disagree with
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 statement.
To begin
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 with, the reason that many argue that being warm and friendly is a good trait in the best
leader
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a manager with
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 type of personality tends to be easier to approach. It is important for a
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 to connect with their
team
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 and provide comfort for them to engage with the supervisor.
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, when a boss greets the new employees with warm welcomes and smiles, it will help the newcomers feel more comfortable and may help to adapt to the environment quickly.
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, I believe that there are other traits and factors that are valuable to leading a
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 being easy to approach is important, overall it is more important for a
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 to have problem-solving skills and knowledge within the domain. In order to solve a problem that a company is facing, it requires domain knowledge.
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, the supervisor can utilise their problem-solving skills to allocate tasks to the
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 and have the
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 work together in an effective way and to work towards the goal.
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, when a worker calls in sick, it is a manager's duty to make sure that the shift is covered and that the arrangement made within the
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 can still operate the tasks as usual. To conclude, being warm and friendly is important as a
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, I believe teamwork makes the dream work.
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, I believe having domain knowledge and problem-solving skills are the non-negotiable traits of a great
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • approachable
  • job satisfaction
  • turnover
  • blur professional boundaries
  • favoritism
  • authority
  • productive relationships
  • disciplined
  • focused teams
  • adapt
  • team dynamics
  • formality
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