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It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subject what are the causes? What will be the it’s effects on society?

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number
 of
students
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science
subject
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subject
 especially in developing countries due
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 a plethora of reasons but the main reason behind
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lack
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 of
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practical skills.
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the causes and solutions to encourage the
students
 to study the
subject
 as
science
 and
thus
 lead to a logical conclusion. To pinpoint the paramount causation behind the lack of
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facility
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 and non-skilled teachers in the school institution, many
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students
 are losing interest to study
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a
science
subject
. Another observation in
this
 regard is that expensive cost is very costlier in case of
students
 are decided to purser
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 carrier in the
science
 field.
Moreover
, a limited
number
 of jobs are available in the research fields with huge competition, it's very difficult to secure a job in the future.
Hence
, it's apparent why many of the
students
 are not choosing to study
science
subject
.
By contrast
, it is predicted that the thrones of the area cannot be neglected. The most worrying aspect is that less
number of
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resources in the doctor's
fields
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 which creates catastrophic problems
to
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 society.
For instance
, during covid pandemic times, many people
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died due to less
number
 of doctors
to treat
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 patients in
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developing countries.
In addition
, it's difficult to find the cure
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 the diseases like cancer to treat patients in the research stream. To
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,
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 causes need action and attention to protect the citizen of the people. Government should allocate some budget to provide
scholarship
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 to
students
 whose from
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low and
middle income
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background
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.
In addition
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goverment
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government
 should give full support to school institutions by providing all the
necessarity
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necessary
 which encourage
students
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 background as their career path.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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