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Solar energy is becoming more and more popular as a source of household energy in many countries around the world . Why is this? What are the advantages and disadcantages of solar energy.

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Everyone is aware of the environmental crisis these days, but solar
energy
 is emerging as an eco-friendly
energy
 source.
Although
 solar
energy
 has a lot of merits, its
drawback
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drawbacks
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 should not be ignored. The aim of
this
 essay is to explore both points of view and I will elucidate my opinion
at the end
 of
this
 essay.
To begin
 with, solar
energy
 is environmentally friendly as it does not produce any greenhouse gases
in contrast
 to fossil fuels.
Besides
, solar
energy
 is comparatively cheap as we
could
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 get solar
energy
 everywhere during the day.
Moreover
, the
Sun
 provide unlimited
energy
 to the
earth
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,
thus
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so
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 we do not have to worry about the depletion of
energy
 source.
Lastly
, if we have small solar
energy
panels
, we could get electricity anywhere.
In other words
, the method of getting
energy
 is more convenient and comfortable than other sources,
thus
 in the
future
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 we might see many people around us attaching
energy
panels
 to our bodies to charge electronic devices.
On the other hand
, solar
energy
 is still far away from us, as it has still fatal demerits. Most of all, though it has no price to get
energy
 from the
sun
, the price of the initial installation of
panels
 is huge. We need a huge place to set up all
panels
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,
besides
 very sophisticated skills are required as the angle of
panels
 should be toward the
sun
. All these should be done by elaborate high-level engineers.
Furthermore
, the amount of solar
energy
 we can get from the
sun
is varying
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varies
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 depending on the weather or regions.
For example
, if the weather is terrible
due to
 rainy seasons or if we try to set up solar
energy
panels
 in high latitudes
such
 as the
arctic
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 region, it is almost impossible to get efficient
energy
.
To sum up
, it is irrefutable that solar
energy
 is one of the top clean
energy
 which we have to pursue in the future to stop global warming.
However
, I firmly support the idea that it is not a good idea for all
energy
 should be replaced with solar
energy
 considering all kinds of disadvantages.
Submitted by seonkorea on

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