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Solar energy is becoming more and more popular as a source of household energy in many countries around the world . Why is this? What are the advantages and disadcantages of solar energy.

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Everyone is aware of the environmental crisis these days, but solar
energy
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 is emerging as an eco-friendly
energy
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 source.
Although
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 solar
energy
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 has a lot of merits, its
drawback
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 should not be ignored. The aim of
this
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 essay is to explore both points of view and I will elucidate my opinion
at the end
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 of
this
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To begin
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 with, solar
energy
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 is environmentally friendly as it does not produce any greenhouse gases
in contrast
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 to fossil fuels.
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, solar
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 is comparatively cheap as we
could
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 get solar
energy
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 everywhere during the day.
Moreover
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, the
Sun
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 provide unlimited
energy
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 to the
earth
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,
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thus
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 we do not have to worry about the depletion of
energy
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 source.
Lastly
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, if we have small solar
energy
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panels
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, we could get electricity anywhere.
In other words
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, the method of getting
energy
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 is more convenient and comfortable than other sources,
thus
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 in the
future
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 we might see many people around us attaching
energy
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panels
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 to our bodies to charge electronic devices.
On the other hand
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, solar
energy
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 is still far away from us, as it has still fatal demerits. Most of all, though it has no price to get
energy
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 from the
sun
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, the price of the initial installation of
panels
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 is huge. We need a huge place to set up all
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panels
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,
besides
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 very sophisticated skills are required as the angle of
panels
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 should be toward the
sun
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. All these should be done by elaborate high-level engineers.
Furthermore
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, the amount of solar
energy
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 we can get from the
sun
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is varying
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varies
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 depending on the weather or regions.
For example
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, if the weather is terrible
due to
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 rainy seasons or if we try to set up solar
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panels
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 in high latitudes
such
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 as the
arctic
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 region, it is almost impossible to get efficient
energy
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.
To sum up
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, it is irrefutable that solar
energy
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 is one of the top clean
energy
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 which we have to pursue in the future to stop global warming.
However
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, I firmly support the idea that it is not a good idea for all
energy
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 should be replaced with solar
energy
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 considering all kinds of disadvantages.

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