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The chart compares the figure for the
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 in England and Wales who live in a rented house and an owned one between 1918 and 2011. Overall, the ratio of households who live in owned accommodation steadily goes up, which rise from 22% to 69% between 1918 and 2001, while the percentage of
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 in rented houses shows the opposite trend that falls to 31% in 2001 from 77% in 1918.
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, the proportion of these two groups of figures became equal at 50% in 1971. It shows the biggest gap between the number of these two kinds of
families
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 in 1918.
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, the percentage of
families
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 who lived in a rented house between 1939 to 1953 remained stable at 68%.
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, in the latest period of the decade years from 2001 - 2011, the ratio of households in owned accommodation rise again and grow to 36% after almost a century of fall. Comparatively, the figure for
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 in rented houses fall to 63% in 2011.
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