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Some believe that living in an apartment are advantageous, but other argue it in contrast. Discuss both views.

#believe #apartment #contrast
It has been argued by some that living in a flat has many merits while
,
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this
 view is contradicted by some folks. In
this
 essay, I will gauge both sides of opinions . On the one hand, there
is
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 two main benefits of living in the blocks of
flat
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a flat
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.
First
 ,
this
 enables individuals to commute to
the
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work quickly since it is becoming more common to build
high-rised
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high-rise
high-rises
 flats in the hubs of cities rather than houses.
For example
, the majority of the population in the
center
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 of Hong Kong and London
live
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 in
the
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blocks of
flat
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flats
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.
Second
,
reasonable
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 price of land taxes makes the apartments more suitable for
the
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families. It is common knowledge that taxes can be
payed
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 by several
people
 and there will be less burden of the land tax.
For example
, in New York due to
high
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 prices of houses and flats , several students hire one room
of
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 a flat.
On the other hand
,
people
 are not able to do outdoor activities in the flat. A small balcony only provides
the
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 view of the city .
Therefore
, children who live in
apartment
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apartments
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 spend more time
on
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playing video games which encourages
the
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 sedentary lifestyle.
For example
, during COVID-19
youngesters
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youngsters
 only did their
homeworks
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homework
 and it
also
 stimulated the less active lifestyle
especially
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 those who live in
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an apartment
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apartment
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apartments
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.Another drawback is noise pollution which
is usually comes
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 from
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a neighbor's
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neighbor's
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neighbour's
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house
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houses
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.
People
 are likely to listen to each
others
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other's
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 footsteps and even words.
Thus
 ,
people
 can feel a little insecure and unsafe in the
apartment
 To sum up ,
although
 living in
the
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apartment
 can be cheap and easy to get to work ,
people
 will be less active and unsafe from noise pollution
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