Today more and more tourists are visiting places where the conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara Desert or The Antarctic. What areNowd disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

,Yes it has no doubt in the contemporary era it is a trend to visit
such
places
where the condition is not good like
Sahara
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desert or the Antarctic . Going there with tourist lead to many difficulties . I will discuss the disadvantages in upcoming paragraphs .
Firstly
, most folks like to climb mount ,Everest . So for doing
this
sometimes they get failure in their trip .
For instance
, sometimes ice is slid from one point to another . So
these
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is
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the cause of
death
. Every year more than 10 thousand masses are dead the main cause for
this
is landscape .
Although
, some
tourist
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tourists
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like to go
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to desert
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desert
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like Sahara,
thar
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that
, and Mongolia . So these
palces
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places
are very dry . So sometimes folks don't get water for drinking .
Thus
,
this
is
the
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another factor
that is
responsible for individuals'
death
.
Moreover
, people get affected by some skin problems as well as some lose their eyesight. Because
,
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these
places
desert and Antarctic
is
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very near to the sun due to
this
they are affected .
Furthermore
, it is
a
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merely a negative trend because all the folks follow
this
trend
toaccording
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according
to according
each
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other .
Hence
,
for
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,tackle
this
problem authorities should make new rules regarding
this
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tourist
places
. To conclude , it's only the game of
death
whose like to go there it's only the sign of
death
. So if
masses
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like to go
such
places
only they
are go
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where no dangerous
situation
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situations
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are available
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