Although many people value public parks, this space could be better used for the other purposes such as residential areas for the ever growing population or to develop business and build economics. To what extend do you agree or dis agree with this statement.

Even though the majority of the public values the recreation ground, there is a common belief that gardens can be used for more development programs

such

as housing or industrial projects which will help the economy of the country.

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I will agree with keeping a public garden and in

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I will support my opinion with an example. One of the main reasons why

this

ground should be a public park, Is it is very important for society to relax when

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require

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. According to the article published on World

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website, They said that majority of

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family

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all over the world are suffering from depression due to restless life.

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It has requested to give enough time for relaxation and being with family and create more public gardens all over the main cities with high populations in the world. Another reason why I agree

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the

health

condition of the old families and the young generation who are suffering from many

health

problems due to lack of exercise to keep their body fit. Many of the people who are living in city areas suffer from obesity, high blood pressure, high cholesterol level in the blood so on. The main things they can prevent from worst

health

conditions by doing exercises

such

as walking, cycling and so on.

Therefore

public parks located close to the city are doing a major role keep people healthy and fit. On the other ,hand there is a common belief that uses these recreational grounds for the economical development of the country. The government can be used to make apartments for people who are suffering from a lack of land in the city areas to make their residences or build an industrial complex

furthermore

this

type of project will be created more employment opportunities and give solutions to the residents' problems. In conclusion, Keeping public garden as it is will do a grading job

such

as relief public's stress, helping to maintain physical fitness and

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building a wealthy generation in the country and

also

giving the solution to unemployment and shortage of resident by making house schemes and industrial buildings,

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I believe that the benefits of keeping a garden eventually outweigh the benefits of building houses and industrial buildings.