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The crime nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advance in technology which can help prevent and solve crime.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the past, the
crime
 rate is very high.
On the contrary
, Secure and solvable
crime
 can be helped by developing
technology
, so the offence is decreasing related to the past. From my point of view, I agree with
this
 statement. The reason will be extended in the following paragraph. Before, The conclusion is reached.
To begin
 with, Developing
technology
 makes officers' equipment better that easier to catch a criminal.
Furthermore
,
cloud-system
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cloud systems
show examples
 sync the data of criminals together in one device.
For example
, laptops can be put in police officers' cars. They can use GPS to find criminal vehicles and information about criminals at the same time, making it easier to do their duty.
As a result
, the
crime
 rate is decreasing because people who aim to commit a
crime
 find it challenging to do it.
Moreover
, camera
technology
such
 as CCTV photographs has helped in various ways to detect thieves and their activities.
For instance
 ,
Arm
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armed
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 robbers can be seen in CCTV footage even when they are not aware because Cameras are capable of tracing every movement and activity
that is
 made at places
they
Rephrase
where they
show examples
 were installed.
In particular
, there was a case of murder reported
last
 week that took place in Anambra State, Awka to be precise. After some days, the victims were arrested by police.
Therefore
, CCTV cameras have the ability to trace and discover criminal activities.
Consequently
, prevents them from subsequent robbery
To conclude
. I agree with
this
 cause. When
technology
 developed, it was easier for an officer to work with their duty
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