The only way to improve road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offenses. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge and experience.

The reason behind applying traffic
rules
of government is to reduce the chance of causing accidents and improve the
safety
of
people
travelling on the
road
. Along with the
rules
,
government
Add an article
the government
show examples
also
implement
punishment
for not obeying the
rules
. Many
people
think that the best
way
to improve
road
safety
is by giving stricter
punishment
to careless drivers. To a certain point, I would partly agree with the statement, but there are other methods that could
also
be used to improve it as imposing a stricter penalty,
beside
Replace the word
besides
show examples
, is not the only
way
to ensure
safety
on roads. On one hand, enforcement of hard
punishment
on
people
who are not following traffic
rules
is
a
Correct article usage
the
show examples
most important
way
to maintain harmony on roads.
Fix the agreement mistake
Individuals
show examples
Individual
Add an article
An individual
The individual
show examples
should maintain
road
discipline while driving.
However
, for youngsters who do rash driving, the only
ways
Fix the agreement mistake
way
show examples
to educate them is by imposing heavy penalties and
fine
Fix the agreement mistake
fines
show examples
.As per a survey, most
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
people
follow the
rules
only
Change preposition
out of
show examples
of
Change preposition
for
show examples
fear
Add an article
the fear
show examples
of
punishment
. If they are not under any pressure of
punishment
they will not do what they
are suppose
Change the verb form
are supposed
show examples
to do.
Hence
, in my
opinion
Add a comma
,opinion
show examples
the best
way
to maintain smooth roads is by application of rigid punishments.
On the other hand
, there is another method that the government could use in improving
road
safety
besides
having
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
stricter
punishment
. They could make a campaign about
safety
Replace the word
safe
show examples
driving through various media which would show the effect of careless driving.
For instance
,
making
Wrong verb form
make
show examples
a
safety
video about
road
safety
and upload it
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
social media since the message will be effectively spread in
this
kind of media. As more
people
are watching these videos, it is hoped that drivers will have a clearer view of
safety
Replace the word
safe
show examples
driving. In conclusion, to a certain extent, I agree that having a stricter
punishment
would improve
road
safety
. But I
also
believe that it should
also
be supported
with
Change preposition
in
show examples
other ways, and one of them is by giving audio-visual shows about
safety
Replace the word
safe
show examples
driving.
Submitted by thuylqd76 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: